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::*Thanks ], I've made some amendments to the lead. ] (]) 05:43, 31 December 2024 (UTC) ::*Thanks ], I've made some amendments to the lead. ] (]) 05:43, 31 December 2024 (UTC)
::*:Yes. I like your addition Nikkimaria. I think the reader wants to know ''why'' Washington initially fought for the British (French Indian War) and then against them (Revolutionary War). That should be mentioned in the introduction section. Thank you. ] (]) 06:08, 31 December 2024 (UTC) ::*:Yes. I like your addition Nikkimaria. I think the reader wants to know ''why'' Washington initially fought for the British (French Indian War) and then against them (Revolutionary War). That should be mentioned in the introduction section. Thank you. ] (]) 06:08, 31 December 2024 (UTC)
:* '''Optional:''' Would it be good to briefly mention Washington and cherry tree story is just a myth invented by Weems, in the Early life (1732–1752) section? It is an interesting story. Readers might want to know more about it. I know it is mentioned in the article later. Here is the Mount Vernon article: . Maybe mention the George Washington and Cherry Tree Myth has never been verified. Thank you.] (]) 03:50, 4 January 2025 (UTC) :* '''Optional:''' Would it be good to briefly mention Washington and cherry tree story is just a myth invented by Weems, in the Early life (1732–1752) section? It is an interesting story. Readers might want to know more about it. I know it is mentioned in the article later. Here is the Mount Vernon article: . Maybe mention the George Washington and Cherry Tree Myth has never been verified. Thank you. ] (]) 03:50, 4 January 2025 (UTC)


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George Washington

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As of 19 January 2025, 19:04 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.
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Nominator(s): ErnestKrause (talk) 00:57, 27 December 2024 (UTC); Nikkimaria (talk) 01:07, 27 December 2024 (UTC)

This article is about the founding father George Washington. It is a co-nomination with Nikkimaria and is the sixth time that this page has been nominated. A previous GA nomination of the article from a decade ago was successful though subsequent FAC nominations did not move forward. The current nomination is a significantly trimmed and condensed version of the Washington biography which previously had reached about 230Kb in system size, though now condensed to about 160Kb system size. Looking forward to comments and criticisms from editors interested in this founding father. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:57, 27 December 2024 (UTC)

Comments from Cmguy777

  • I recommend George Washington pass FA nomination. It is well written. The only issue I noticed is the Introduction does not mention why/when Washington joined the Patriot forces. Maybe something like, "Believing Parliamentary Acts and the King were oppressing American colonists, Washington joined the Patriot forces." Maybe something to that effect. Thank you. Cmguy777 (talk) 18:23, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
  • Optional: Would it be good to briefly mention Washington and cherry tree story is just a myth invented by Weems, in the Early life (1732–1752) section? It is an interesting story. Readers might want to know more about it. I know it is mentioned in the article later. Here is the Mount Vernon article: Cherry Tree Myth. Maybe mention the George Washington and Cherry Tree Myth has never been verified. Thank you. Cmguy777 (talk) 03:50, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

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Given the large number of images, I'm only going to highlight any issues:

AirshipJungleman29

Alright, let's have another VA3 bio. Comments to follow; as always, they will be suggestions, not demands, so feel free to refuse with justifications. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:39, 1 January 2025 (UTC)

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  • Per MOS:ROLEBIO, the "and planter" bit of the first sentence is relatively non-integral to Washington's importance, and could be removed. The full "Founding Father of the United States" is also a little top-heavy (especially as "of the United States" is duplicated in the first sentence) but I don't quite know how you could slim it.
  • Per MOS:LEADREL, "Washington's first public office was as surveyor of its Culpeper County from 1749 to 1750" is relatively little emphasised in the body (around 75 words) so probably doesn't need a mention in the lead.
  • "In 1752, he became a major in the Virginia Regiment. During the French and Indian War, Washington was promoted to lieutenant colonel and subsequently became head of the Virginia Regiment." is to my eyes, slightly too focused on positions attained, especially considering his role in starting the war. One mention of the Virginia Regiment should do.
  • The lead links "American Revolutionary War" twice (as it does for Patriot (American Revolution)) and doesn't give its start or end dates, which are likely needed per WP:EXPLAINLEAD. In fact, the only event between 1752 and 1787 the lead dates is his 1775 appointment.
  • "His 1796 farewell address became a preeminent statement on republicanism in which he wrote about the importance of national unity and the dangers that regionalism, partisanship, and foreign influence pose to it." is a little clunky grammatically, suggest rephrasing.
  • You could mention Mount Vernon in the lead. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:57, 1 January 2025 (UTC)
Thanks AirshopJungleman29, I've done some reworking of the lead. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:13, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

Kavyansh

Placeholder. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:17, 3 January 2025 (UTC)

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